Bequest – Friday Fictioneers

copyight-sean-fallon©Sean Fallon

The solicitor wore an expression of sympathy and handed me the sealed envelope. After shaking his hand, I maintained a mask of my own until the lift doors closed. Alone, I tore at the gummed strip with trembling hands. This was what I had been waiting for my entire adult life.

My daughter inherits my estate. The enclosed key will reveal all.

At last, my reward. The address and name of the bank followed.

I now remember that I skipped my way there.

In the dark bowels of the bank, I opened the safety box.

Even in death, he tortured me.

 rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com continues to run the successful Friday Fictioneers where authors write a piece of 100 word fiction on a photo prompt and exchange comments on their work. Thank you Rochelle for keeping this group active.

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37 responses to “Bequest – Friday Fictioneers

  1. This father and daughter deserve each other, I think. Very good story – the open-endedness works very well.

  2. jellico84

    Oh, how cruel.

  3. Oh dear. That can’t be good. I am super curious what’s in the box. ☺

  4. What’s in the box! 😉

  5. Now, that is a horrid Dad to do such a thing to his daughter! Brilliant tale!

  6. Well, that left me hanging…very intriguing story.

  7. gahlearner

    That seems to be a very deep rift between father and daughter. Horrible if that even goes beyond death. Good story.

  8. I love the layers to the relationship – I felt sorry for her at first but then thought they seemed to be two sides of the same coin

  9. Adam Ickes

    Oh man. I really want to know what is (or isn’t) in that box! Well played.

  10. An evil father. This begs the question..does she deserve such treatment?

  11. Very intrigued with their relationship and desperate to know what’s in the box? Love your writing! 🙂

  12. A very telling story, Lindy.. And she has ‘no comeback’… Darn.

  13. So many questions – did she kill him? What’s in the box? And whose side are we supposed to be on? Clever stuff!

  14. mickwynn2013

    Don’t know who’s worse, him for what he’s done or her for nurturing her greed for so long, waiting for him to die.

  15. Nasty fellow, hope he got a hot reception where he ended up. However I very much liked your take on this prompt. Mike

  16. Nothing changes, does it. Nicely dark.

  17. Thank you Caerlynn. What a great name you have.
    Regards
    Lindy

  18. Sounds like he understood her greed and treated her justly. Nice story.

  19. Dear Lindy,

    Oh, you sly fox. You left me hanging. This doesn’t end well, does it? Well written.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  20. Is there nothing in the box or something terrible? Very intriguing.

  21. Often the most damaging of blows as it reveals the depth of feeling. Thanks for commenting.

  22. Ah… yes no reward just pain.. pain delivered from beyond the grave-

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