Photo prompt©Rochelle Risoff-Fields
Sorry Fictioneers, this did start out as a comic piece but that dark side intervened again.
‘My Gramps lived in there.’
‘The brick place?’
‘Nope.’
‘That big white place on the hill?’
‘Nope.’
‘Where then?’
‘In there. Next to the blue one.’
‘Don’t be stupid. No one lives in a bottle.’
‘My Gramps did! Mum told me he was in there.’
‘No way. And anyway, how did he get inside?’
‘Magic.’
‘There’s no such thing!’
‘Yes there is. My mum said so.’
‘It’s impossible. I can’t even slide my finger in.’
‘No stupid. You need to be transformed.’
‘To what?’
‘Ash.’
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ooouuuu, I like it! The last word says it all!
Thank you. I’m so glad that you liked my offering.
Thank you Sandra. It was fun to write but after I posted it I did worry that it might upset some of the readers.
Exquisite timing!
Dear Lindy,
This puts me in mind of an old song by Henson Cargill called Skip a Rope. Not so much the subject matter but the line in the song that says, “Ain’t it kinda funny what the children say.” The dialogue told the whole story. Very well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
PS Just in case you aren’t familiar with the song. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xRxEzuoUWHI
Thank you Rochelle. I haven’t heard of the song but will look this up. I love writing from a child’s point of view and think that we can learn so much by listening to their conversations!
PS Rochelle. I just listened to the link you posted and what a great song.
I thought it was funny. Nice job!
It did end up dark, but I like how you got there. Well done.
This made me smile despite the darkish theme. It’s so true, for children these ideas are absolutes. Grandpa is in there means grandpa is in there, no ifs and buts. Fun story.
He may have been in there, but not alive. It’s funny they way kids perceive things.
Thank you Russell. I’m glad that the childlike perception came over. It’s not always easy to get into their heads but I do enjoy writing in this voice.
Ashley had better watch out if there’s a fire about
Dark indeed!
Thanks for commenting Bjorn. I can’t seem to escape from that side.
It was some humor here… but dark, and it seems to be the trend this week… Love the dialogue.