Left Behind – 100 words (ish) for the Friday Fictioneers

Photo Prompt ©Jellico’s Stationhouse

A shout out to the amazing Rochelle at http://www.rochellewisofffields.wordpress.com. She organises the photo prompts and links for the Friday Fictioneers. Authors write a piece of 100 word fiction, prose or poetry based on a photo prompt and exchange comments on each other’s work.  If you are a writer of short fiction, join the group and let your imagination feed us with your stories. 

 

‘How will you manage?’ A snowfall of damp tissue fell from Rosie’s fingers, scattering on to the hall carpet. She resisted the urge to reach out her shaking hand and grab his shirt.

His back to her, Geoff ignored her cry, grunting as he lifted the dufflebag strap on to his shoulder.

He had given up answering.

‘Who’ll look after you?’ A sob broke the question. She chewed her lip. Why couldn’t she keep quiet?

Geoff sighed, quickly pulling the door open but as he stepped through, he turned and blew a kiss.

‘I’ll be back next weekend, Mum.’

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32 responses to “Left Behind – 100 words (ish) for the Friday Fictioneers

  1. A bit clingy, isn’t she?

  2. The sad eventuality for all of us with kids, unfortunately, but they have to fledge, nicely written

  3. gahlearner

    Oh dear, the drama. I loved the twist in the end. Worry is what mums do.

  4. not what i was expecting!

  5. A mother’s love! Your title is perfect. I have written a similar one.

  6. 😊Good one! Let’s hear it for mother love.

  7. Nicely misdirected. 🙂

  8. Good job, although the bicycle is well hidden. I remember when I first faced the idea that children leave and we need to prepare ourselves to deal with it. Nicely done.

  9. Life Lessons of a Dog Lover

    Loved this. Loved the image of the snowfall of damp tissue.

  10. michael1148humphris

    Mothers all over history would relate to this story.

  11. What a feast of emotions. I feel her pain all the way, I want to hold on to him with her. And when he offers that final gesture, I want to burst into tears with her, for I see why she loves him so much.

  12. Mums eh? They do like to fuss

  13. Oh my, the drama. Depending on our age, we look differently at that situation. Nicely done.

  14. jellico84

    Love it!

  15. The title captures the emotion in this perfectly.

  16. Dear Lindy,

    Loved the misdirect. You captured the feeling of having to let go of a son. Been there three times. Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    PS Thank you for the shout out. 😉

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