Break Time

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Photo copyright Susan Eames

Sitting in a car for hours is bad for older travellers and so, the couple take a break in a little known Spanish town. Siesta means it is deserted and they have no trouble parking in a plaza near the centre. Strolling along the empty streets, they admire the ornamental facades of the stone buildings.

Suddenly, the woman yelps and falls to the ground. Construction workers run out of a bar across the road, gabbling in their foreign tongue as they try to pull her to her feet. Even though the pain makes her eyes water, she waves them away.

‘De nada’ is one phrase she knows but from the crack she heard in her ankle, it’s going to be a big problem.


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11 responses to “Break Time

  1. Ouch. Lovely little slice of life story.

  2. Michael Humphris

    Nothing worse than hearing that crack,

  3. I wish she didn’t know the words ‘de nada’.

  4. I’ve a feeling she’ll regret saying that!

    My yarn!

  5. Wait–what? Why did she pretend it was nothing when she KNEW her ankle was broken? I’d have let them fuss over me and get me to a doctor!

  6. Whyever did she shoo them away…

  7. Sounds painful ; so much for the peaceful stroll.

  8. Time to swallow her pride and accept the help!

  9. Ugh. I wish they would have gotten her to a hospital, or were they going to wait for an ambulance? Good story.

  10. Ouch that crack sounds bad. Definitely not a “de nada.” Good story.

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